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:icontrixieconfident:Donít let them push you around, youíre better than them...

Fluttershy really started to sound like Trixie during that scene, a mix of using 3rd person and telling Rarity and Pinkie no one gives a "flying feather" about what they do. She even called Pinkie simple.

Edit: Moved Trixie's and Fluttershy's mane and tail so they don't overlap with Trixie's face.

Edit02: FFFFFFFFUUUUU! When I made that edit I forgot to change the name to the better name which I didn't save.

MLP:FIM belongs to Hasbro.
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This is a very good work of art right here! The drawing style is superb, the shading adds a comfortable level of depth, and the characters are spot on!

The fact that you added Trixie in there as a twist was perfect. I laughed pretty hard here. It's very clever.

Overall, you did a really good job both capturing character expressions, attitudes, and the mood of the entire scene.

The only improvements I would recommend would be to make their forelegs slightly thicker and their hind legs slightly thinner to balance each other out. Other than that, nice job! :D
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86 out of 88 deviants thought this was fair.

Have in mind that I'm not too experienced in this "critique" thing. I'm doing this because you wanted critiques, and I think I can make good points. So, let's begin, shall we?

Let's divide this in segments. First, Vision: Well. It's a scene within the actual show, but with a twist. Nothing really new, so I'm giving you a 3/5. It's just a reimagined scene.

Originality: Well, it's original. I've never seen this with Trixie around. And the Star Wars reminiscences (I hope that's the correct spelling) just make it better. So, 4/5 for you!

Technique: Impeccable. The only thing holding a 5/5 back is a better management of expressions. Rarity and Pinkie Pie should feel insulted or offended by Fluttershy, yet they don't change their expressions.

Impact: Well, It's a "retelling" of a scene, with a twist. A good twist, and, for me, surprising enough to make it a 4.5/5. So, good enough.

Let's sum it up:

Vision: 3/5
Originality: 4/5
Technique: 4,5/5
Impact: 4,5/5

Overall, good job and keep 'em coming!

I hope this is useful for you. As I said, I'm not experienced in critiques, but you were asking for one, so I gave you one. Also, if you find grammar or spelling errors, I'm sorry. English is not my mother tongue, so I'm prone to them. Keep that in mind.
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DragonTamer360 Apr 4, 2014  New member Hobbyist General Artist
Fluttershy nooooooo you went to the dark side! 3":
pokemonlegend999 Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Kyouko Toshinou (Adorable Sparkle) [V2] i da old fluttershy and i say..... Bumblebee icon die or bumble bee will haunt u 4 ever
LaughingJack2203 Mar 15, 2014  New member Hobbyist General Artist
trix I will fucking send you to the moon and if you dare touch my moon caslte you just wished for the shit blown out of you, you little mother fucker bich yea I said it you piece of shit
Raven: Pulls out a minigun YOU'RE SO DEAD, LUNA LULAMOON!!!
AlexKazhdan Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Luna Lulamoon? :confused:
Raven: ...... Facepalms Ugh....... Thanks a lot, Luna....... You messed up with my mind......
AlexKazhdan Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Raven: Pulls out a cannon labelled "ANTI-TROLL CANNON"
AlexKazhdan Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconnightmarelunaplz: :iconsaysplz: What is that strange contraption thou art holding? :iconsaysendplz:
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