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:icontrixieconfident:Donít let them push you around, youíre better than them...

Fluttershy really started to sound like Trixie during that scene, a mix of using 3rd person and telling Rarity and Pinkie no one gives a "flying feather" about what they do. She even called Pinkie simple.

Edit: Moved Trixie's and Fluttershy's mane and tail so they don't overlap with Trixie's face.

Edit02: FFFFFFFFUUUUU! When I made that edit I forgot to change the name to the better name which I didn't save.

MLP:FIM belongs to Hasbro.
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This is a very good work of art right here! The drawing style is superb, the shading adds a comfortable level of depth, and the characters are spot on!

The fact that you added Trixie in there as a twist was perfect. I laughed pretty hard here. It's very clever.

Overall, you did a really good job both capturing character expressions, attitudes, and the mood of the entire scene.

The only improvements I would recommend would be to make their forelegs slightly thicker and their hind legs slightly thinner to balance each other out. Other than that, nice job! :D
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140 out of 145 deviants thought this was fair.

Have in mind that I'm not too experienced in this "critique" thing. I'm doing this because you wanted critiques, and I think I can make good points. So, let's begin, shall we?

Let's divide this in segments. First, Vision: Well. It's a scene within the actual show, but with a twist. Nothing really new, so I'm giving you a 3/5. It's just a reimagined scene.

Originality: Well, it's original. I've never seen this with Trixie around. And the Star Wars reminiscences (I hope that's the correct spelling) just make it better. So, 4/5 for you!

Technique: Impeccable. The only thing holding a 5/5 back is a better management of expressions. Rarity and Pinkie Pie should feel insulted or offended by Fluttershy, yet they don't change their expressions.

Impact: Well, It's a "retelling" of a scene, with a twist. A good twist, and, for me, surprising enough to make it a 4.5/5. So, good enough.

Let's sum it up:

Vision: 3/5
Originality: 4/5
Technique: 4,5/5
Impact: 4,5/5

Overall, good job and keep 'em coming!

I hope this is useful for you. As I said, I'm not experienced in critiques, but you were asking for one, so I gave you one. Also, if you find grammar or spelling errors, I'm sorry. English is not my mother tongue, so I'm prone to them. Keep that in mind.
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Deadpone Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2016  New Deviant
So now I know the one who REALLY did it. *axes Trixie down the middle*
Phantomlord01 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2016
Let the hate flow through you!!!!
StargazeHeartaccount Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2016
Trixie EqG (a great the power full trixie) plz I AM GREAT AND MEANER AND POWERFULERER AND *I control Trixie voice* STUPID AND DUMBEST TRIXIEEEE

Robotponytron Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2016  Student
Oh no trixie is back
GalaxyGal-11 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2016  Student General Artist
This is just too good for me, ,idk why either
CheesycheeseoCheese Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2015  Student
Star Wars?
RealDiegoAmateur Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2015  Hobbyist Filmographer
If there's anything worse than preachy pinkie pie from "the last roundup" is hearing the "GAP" Trixie
brony3099 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2015
Love the comic hate the episode.
KOOKIEMONSTER1 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2015
I saw it coming on panel 2 XD
residentsmile Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2015
Come to the trix side.
purpleghost8 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2015
AdamsCamaroZ28 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014
:iconjackiegleasonplz: TO THE MOON, TRIXIE!!
1cosmiconsciousness Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014
Better than the actual episode
thepowerpuffmaker Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
yup trixies being nosy again . why trixie why????!!!!  me :Sexy face  trixie :Jafar Trollface 
MLPegasis4898 Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
An awesome alternate trainer!!! :D :D :D
psychopathneb Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Student Artist
make apic of fs and trix as a team
DragonTamer360 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Fluttershy nooooooo you went to the dark side! 3":
LillyGeneva Featured By Owner May 1, 2014  Student Digital Artist
No, I disagree! Noes! No, I disagree! Noes! No, I disagree! Noes! 
pokemonlegend999 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Kyouko Toshinou (Adorable Sparkle) [V2] i da old fluttershy and i say..... Bumblebee icon die or bumble bee will haunt u 4 ever
LaughingJack2203 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Derpywhooves109w Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014
trix I will fucking send you to the moon and if you dare touch my moon caslte you just wished for the shit blown out of you, you little mother fucker bich yea I said it you piece of shit
DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013
Raven: Pulls out a minigun YOU'RE SO DEAD, LUNA LULAMOON!!!
AlexKazhdan Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Luna Lulamoon? :confused:
DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013
Raven: ...... Facepalms Ugh....... Thanks a lot, Luna....... You messed up with my mind......
AlexKazhdan Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013
Raven: Pulls out a cannon labelled "ANTI-TROLL CANNON"
AlexKazhdan Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconnightmarelunaplz: :iconsaysplz: What is that strange contraption thou art holding? :iconsaysendplz:
DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013
Raven: Starts firing the cannon at her

AlexKazhdan Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconshockedlunaplz: :iconsaysplz: ... What happened? Where am I? And who are you? :iconsaysendplz:
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Jesserfly Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
LoneWolf257 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013
Soooooooooo... I sense a star wars reference here.
PegasistersArt Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
The great and powerful Flutteshy!
123cupcake Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013
Beeblur Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013
AskMerisstheSkeletal Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
-shoots trixie with magic blast- dont listen fluttershy! she is fooling you!
SinnethTheHedgehog Featured By Owner May 26, 2013
New Fluttershy smash! xD
HokutoUlrik Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Read Trixie with the Emperor's voice.
ShyPonyGirl Featured By Owner May 22, 2013
we lost fluttershy
FlameRays Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012
We lost!
Holhander Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012
is it just me or did anyone else read Trixie's dialog as The Emperor? P:
TheMasterofDespair Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
XD190 Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Trixie: Remember back to your early teachings. Fluttershy. "All those who gain confidence are afraid to lose even that." Even old Fluttershy.

Fluttershy: old Fluttershy used her confidence only for helping others.

Trixie: helping others is a point of view, Fluttershy. And old Fluttershy's point of view is not the only valid one. The confidence of new Fluttershy believes in serenity and helping also, yet it is considered by old Fluttershy to be. . .

Fluttershy: . . . meaner.

Trixie: . . . from old Fluttershy's point of view. new Fluttershy and the old Fluttershy are similar in almost every way, including their quest for greater bravery. The difference between the two is that self confidence is not afraid of being meaner. That is why it is more powerful.

Fluttershy: The new Fluttershy relies on confidence for her strength. she thinks inward, only about herself.

Trixie: And the old Fluttershy didn't?

Fluttershy: The old Fluttershy was selfless . . . and only cared about others.

Trixie *smiles*

Trixie: Or so you've been trained to believe. Why is it, then, that she has asked you to do something you feel is wrong?

Fluttershy: I'm not sure it's wrong.

Trixie: Has she asked you to betray the Confidence? A friendship? Your own values? Think. Consider her motives. Keep your mind clear of assumptions. The fear of losing self confidence is a weakness of both the old Fluttershy and the new Fluttershy.

Fluttershy is deep in thought.

Trixie: (continuing) Did you ever hear the tragedy of Darth Pegesis "the brave"?

Fluttershy: No.

Trixie: I thought not. It's not a story other Pony's would tell you. It's a new Fluttershy legend. Darth Pagesis was a Dark Lord of bravery, so confidentl and so wise he could use shear nerve to influence the hormones to create bravery ... He had such a knowledge of the dark side that he could even keep the ones he cared about from being afraid.

Fluttershy: He could actually save people from fear?

Trixie: The dark side of confidence is a pathway to many abilities some consider to be unnatural.

Fluttershy: What happened to him?

Trixie: He became so confident . . . the only thing he was afraid of was losing his confidence, which eventually, of course, he did. Unfortunately, he taught his apprentice everything he knew, then his apprentice scared him into insanity. (smiles) Pagesis never saw it coming. It's ironic he could save others from fear, but not himself.

Fluttershy: Is it possible to learn this power?

Trixie: Not from old Fluttershy.
PowerSourceArts Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
xzenocrimzie Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hehe great job here! ^_^ Made me laugh!
YesImDeadpool Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012   General Artist
*aiming sniper rifle at Trixie* My advice little Pony? Run.
Asdruabel Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Student General Artist
Darth Trixie!
AngelsKarith Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012
Fluttershys scary as heck when shes mad and lol Starwars joke
watcher25 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012
lol 2 da' reference....
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