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Don’t let them push you around, you’re better than them...

Fluttershy really started to sound like Trixie during that scene, a mix of using 3rd person and telling Rarity and Pinkie no one gives a "flying feather" about what they do. She even called Pinkie simple.

Edit: Moved Trixie's and Fluttershy's mane and tail so they don't overlap with Trixie's face.

Edit02: FFFFFFFFUUUUU! When I made that edit I forgot to change the name to the better name which I didn't save.

MLP:FIM belongs to Hasbro.

Critique by ~Azkhare Mar 9, 2012, 6:32:17 PM

Have in mind that I'm not too experienced in this "critique" thing. I'm doing this because you wanted critiques, and I think I can make good points. So, let's begin, shall we?

Let's divide this in segments. First, Vision: Well. It's a scene within the actual show, but with a twist. Nothing really new, so I'm giving you a 3/5. It's just a reimagined scene.

Originality: Well, it's original. I've never seen this with Trixie around. And the Star Wars reminiscences (I hope that's the correct spelling) just make it better. So, 4/5 for you!

Technique: Impeccable. The only thing holding a 5/5 back is a better management of expressions. Rarity and Pinkie Pie should feel insulted or offended by Fluttershy, yet they don't change their expressions.

Impact: Well, It's a "retelling" of a scene, with a twist. A good twist, and, for me, surprising enough to make it a 4.5/5. So, good enough.

Let's sum it up:

Vision: 3/5
Originality: 4/5
Technique: 4,5/5
Impact: 4,5/5

Overall, good job and keep 'em coming!

I hope this is useful for you. As I said, I'm not experienced in critiques, but you were asking for one, so I gave you one. Also, if you find grammar or spelling errors, I'm sorry. English is not my mother tongue, so I'm prone to them. Keep that in mind.

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Critique by *Fervid-Reverie Mar 8, 2012, 6:30:26 PM

This is a very good work of art right here! The drawing style is superb, the shading adds a comfortable level of depth, and the characters are spot on!

The fact that you added Trixie in there as a twist was perfect. I laughed pretty hard here. It's very clever.

Overall, you did a really good job both capturing character expressions, attitudes, and the mood of the entire scene.

The only improvements I would recommend would be to make their forelegs slightly thicker and their hind legs slightly thinner to balance each other out. Other than that, nice job!

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love 11 11

joy 10 10

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~~sad 0 0~~

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~AskMerisstheSkeletal Jun 4, 2013 New member

-shoots trixie with magic blast- dont listen fluttershy! she is fooling you!

~SinnethTheHedgehog May 26, 2013 New member

New Fluttershy smash! xD

~HokutoUlrik May 22, 2013 Hobbyist General Artist

Read Trixie with the Emperor's voice.

~ShyPonyGirl May 22, 2013

we lost fluttershy

~FlameRays Nov 30, 2012

We lost!

~Holhander Nov 26, 2012

is it just me or did anyone else read Trixie's dialog as The Emperor? P:

*TheMasterofDespair Feb 4, 2013

Goooooooooooooooooooood.

~XD190 Oct 10, 2012 Hobbyist General Artist

Trixie: Remember back to your early teachings. Fluttershy. "All those who gain confidence are afraid to lose even that." Even old Fluttershy.

Fluttershy: old Fluttershy used her confidence only for helping others.

Trixie: helping others is a point of view, Fluttershy. And old Fluttershy's point of view is not the only valid one. The confidence of new Fluttershy believes in serenity and helping also, yet it is considered by old Fluttershy to be. . .

Fluttershy: . . . meaner.

Trixie: . . . from old Fluttershy's point of view. new Fluttershy and the old Fluttershy are similar in almost every way, including their quest for greater bravery. The difference between the two is that self confidence is not afraid of being meaner. That is why it is more powerful.

Fluttershy: The new Fluttershy relies on confidence for her strength. she thinks inward, only about herself.

Trixie: And the old Fluttershy didn't?

Fluttershy: The old Fluttershy was selfless . . . and only cared about others.

Trixie *smiles*

Trixie: Or so you've been trained to believe. Why is it, then, that she has asked you to do something you feel is wrong?

Fluttershy: I'm not sure it's wrong.

Trixie: Has she asked you to betray the Confidence? A friendship? Your own values? Think. Consider her motives. Keep your mind clear of assumptions. The fear of losing self confidence is a weakness of both the old Fluttershy and the new Fluttershy.

Fluttershy is deep in thought.

Trixie: (continuing) Did you ever hear the tragedy of Darth Pegesis "the brave"?

Fluttershy: No.

Trixie: I thought not. It's not a story other Pony's would tell you. It's a new Fluttershy legend. Darth Pagesis was a Dark Lord of bravery, so confidentl and so wise he could use shear nerve to influence the hormones to create bravery ... He had such a knowledge of the dark side that he could even keep the ones he cared about from being afraid.

Fluttershy: He could actually save people from fear?

Trixie: The dark side of confidence is a pathway to many abilities some consider to be unnatural.

Fluttershy: What happened to him?

Trixie: He became so confident . . . the only thing he was afraid of was losing his confidence, which eventually, of course, he did. Unfortunately, he taught his apprentice everything he knew, then his apprentice scared him into insanity. (smiles) Pagesis never saw it coming. It's ironic he could save others from fear, but not himself.

Fluttershy: Is it possible to learn this power?

Trixie: Not from old Fluttershy.

~PowerSourceArts Oct 9, 2012 Hobbyist Traditional Artist

Lawl

~xzenocrimzie Sep 9, 2012 Hobbyist Digital Artist

Hehe great job here! ^_^ Made me laugh!

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